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Dear students,

I am SO happy with the work you've done. First of all, asking you to play with the wiki like this was an experiment, and I wasn't sure if you'd be able to do it. Actually, I imagined you complaining to me on Tuesday about not doing it, but you did it!

Below, I have corrected the paragraphs and written little comments for each one.



I hope the rest of your homework is going well! ~Shawna

We are going to construct an essay together! Group 1 will do Body Paragraph 1 (Cause: imitating violence in movies, etc.). Group 2 will do Body Paragraph 2 (Effect: develop bad habits). Group 3 will do Body Paragraph 3 (Cause: psychologically unhealthy). Group 4 will do Body Paragraph 4(Effect: psychological problems for victims).

Group 1: Peter, Leo, Zozo, Ophelia Group 2: Jason, Claire, Shining, Jessica Group 3: Kevin, Timberland, Tang, Lily, Ares Group 4: Rebecca, Kendra, Zoe, Emma Group 1 will download the version we did in class:

** Wonderful, Group 2!!! You are the pride of the nation!!! Especially Jason!!! **
~Shawna reply Shawna: Okay, let me correct it later. ~Jason Ok, Jason. Correct it after group 4 finishes their copy? Umm......Maybe, I am busy these days. I watched the football match before dawn. When I was gonna sleep, it was after 6 o'clock. I am so tired today.
 * Ha ha! Yes, you are all magnificent students....and very clever, especially at imitating me! Unfortunately, Group 2, your paragraph is missing a topic sentence, and it is not super clear what the effect is or that the paragraph is indeed an effect paragraph....The language (i.e. grammar and vocab) is very good though and the transitions too. **

Whew - that was close. When I came on the site about an hour ago, the whole page was erased and replaced with Group 3's essay! Well done, Kevin, putting it back together! Group 4 - it's all up to you now!